Comments on: Cover Letter Clinic Day 6 http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/2007/10/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/ Mutual Respect Sun, 22 Nov 2009 01:25:14 -0400 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.4 hourly 1 By: Bob Zwick http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/2007/10/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/comment-page-1/#comment-119112 Bob Zwick Sat, 21 Nov 2009 14:21:28 +0000 http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/#comment-119112 I thoroughly enjoyed reading these cover letters and critiques. How about posting one that is perfect? I thoroughly enjoyed reading these cover letters and critiques.
How about posting one that is perfect?

]]> By: Jayne Roceo http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/2007/10/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/comment-page-1/#comment-29718 Jayne Roceo Mon, 30 Jun 2008 11:45:37 +0000 http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/#comment-29718 Hello, On Monday I found information on business letter samples. Your post on really added to that, and I found myself nodding throughout your post! Hello, On Monday I found information on business letter samples. Your post on really added to that, and I found myself nodding throughout your post!

]]> By: Deborah Dera http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/2007/10/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/comment-page-1/#comment-4848 Deborah Dera Wed, 24 Oct 2007 12:48:07 +0000 http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/#comment-4848 All else aside, no one has mentioned the closing paragraph. I think it's very weak. "Please contact me if you have any questions or would like to discuss this in further detail. In any case, I wish you the best of luck on your book; I have no doubt that the end product will be completely rewarding." Something like "I'll be in touch with you in x # of days to discuss my proposal," would be a stronger way of closing. As it stands right now, this letter says "thanks for reading my letter but I don't really care if you call me and I probably won't follow up." Just my opinion. Any thoughts? All else aside, no one has mentioned the closing paragraph. I think it’s very weak.

“Please contact me
if you have any questions or would like to discuss this in further detail. In
any case, I wish you the best of luck on your book; I have no doubt that the
end product will be completely rewarding.”

Something like “I’ll be in touch with you in x # of days to discuss my proposal,” would be a stronger way of closing. As it stands right now, this letter says “thanks for reading my letter but I don’t really care if you call me and I probably won’t follow up.” Just my opinion. Any thoughts?

]]> By: Rachel http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/2007/10/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/comment-page-1/#comment-4843 Rachel Wed, 24 Oct 2007 05:08:22 +0000 http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/#comment-4843 @Allena: Shouldn't it be "about helping writers tell their stories in a way that best represents their voices and visions"? I don't think the "his or her"/their debate applies here. (And CMS really approves "their" as a substitute? Ew.) More importantly, why is this person looking for work on Craigslist??? @Allena: Shouldn’t it be “about helping writers tell their stories in a way that best represents their voices and visions”? I don’t think the “his or her”/their debate applies here. (And CMS really approves “their” as a substitute? Ew.)

More importantly, why is this person looking for work on Craigslist???

]]> By: Allena http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/2007/10/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/comment-page-1/#comment-4842 Allena Wed, 24 Oct 2007 02:06:45 +0000 http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/#comment-4842 "am passionate about helping writers tell their stories in a way that best represents their voice and vision.” Well, unless all writers on Earth have the same voice and vision, there’s a subject-object disagreement there." Their is a fine substitution for "his or her" which distracts the reader- check CMS. “am passionate about helping writers tell their stories in a way that best represents their voice and vision.” Well, unless all writers on Earth have the same voice and vision, there’s a subject-object disagreement there.”
Their is a fine substitution for “his or her” which distracts the reader- check CMS.

]]> By: Allena http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/2007/10/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/comment-page-1/#comment-4841 Allena Wed, 24 Oct 2007 02:05:16 +0000 http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/#comment-4841 i also felt the rate was too low! i also felt the rate was too low!

]]> By: Janet http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/2007/10/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/comment-page-1/#comment-4837 Janet Tue, 23 Oct 2007 22:10:26 +0000 http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/#comment-4837 Addendum to my comment above: Especially since the ad seems to call for an editor, not a proofreader. More work = higher rate. I'd more than double in that case. Addendum to my comment above:

Especially since the ad seems to call for an editor, not a proofreader. More work = higher rate. I’d more than double in that case.

]]> By: Janet http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/2007/10/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/comment-page-1/#comment-4836 Janet Tue, 23 Oct 2007 22:08:23 +0000 http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/#comment-4836 I liked the letter, but I was shocked by your low rate, especially given your experience. I would at least double it. I liked the letter, but I was shocked by your low rate, especially given your experience. I would at least double it.

]]> By: Shell http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/2007/10/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/comment-page-1/#comment-4834 Shell Tue, 23 Oct 2007 19:48:18 +0000 http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/#comment-4834 I've got quite a few responses over the past couple of weeks by making the subject line compelling and keeping the cover letter neat and to the point. Not forgetting to add a job related accomplishment too ;) I’ve got quite a few responses over the past couple of weeks by making the subject line compelling and keeping the cover letter neat and to the point. Not forgetting to add a job related accomplishment too ;)

]]> By: Phil http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/2007/10/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/comment-page-1/#comment-4833 Phil Tue, 23 Oct 2007 19:36:40 +0000 http://www.freelancewritinggigs.com/cover-letter-clinic-day-6/#comment-4833 Whether or not to quote rates is a discussion I'd like to see. Another suggestion on the item above: It looks like this person has a ton of experience. If that's the case, leave degree info on resume. That's secondary information after you have a few years of experience. Whether or not to quote rates is a discussion I’d like to see.

Another suggestion on the item above: It looks like this person has a ton of experience. If that’s the case, leave degree info on resume. That’s secondary information after you have a few years of experience.

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