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		<title>By: Jennifer</title>
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		<dc:creator>Jennifer</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Thu, 08 Nov 2007 08:38:38 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>It&#039;s pretty decent. A few people have mentioned the &quot;I&quot; issue and I completely agree. Some sentences could be completely rewritten to avoid it. 

For instance, the letter could be written like this. 

= = = = = =

Dear Mr. ________:

If you are seeking an experienced freelance writer known for delivering quality content that is thoroughly researched, then we should schedule an interview. 

Allow me to introduce myself; I am a frequent contributor to print and online publications including Young Money, WORKS by Nicole Williams, and Experience.com. Additionally, I write a monthly career column for Mahogany magazine and published an essay in the Boston Globe.

As an expert communicator, I can easily break down complex, financial concepts to consumers who would like to apply cutting edge ideas to their daily lives.

If my credentials, further detailed in my attached resume are a good match to your needs, an interview could be mutually beneficial. I&#039;d love to hear from you and learn about your organization&#039;s goals and how I can contribute.

I look forward to our conversation.

Best Regards, 

Susan D. Jobseeker

P.S. You may also visit my online portfolio at www.whatever whatever .com.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>It&#8217;s pretty decent. A few people have mentioned the &#8220;I&#8221; issue and I completely agree. Some sentences could be completely rewritten to avoid it. </p>
<p>For instance, the letter could be written like this. </p>
<p>= = = = = =</p>
<p>Dear Mr. ________:</p>
<p>If you are seeking an experienced freelance writer known for delivering quality content that is thoroughly researched, then we should schedule an interview. </p>
<p>Allow me to introduce myself; I am a frequent contributor to print and online publications including Young Money, WORKS by Nicole Williams, and Experience.com. Additionally, I write a monthly career column for Mahogany magazine and published an essay in the Boston Globe.</p>
<p>As an expert communicator, I can easily break down complex, financial concepts to consumers who would like to apply cutting edge ideas to their daily lives.</p>
<p>If my credentials, further detailed in my attached resume are a good match to your needs, an interview could be mutually beneficial. I&#8217;d love to hear from you and learn about your organization&#8217;s goals and how I can contribute.</p>
<p>I look forward to our conversation.</p>
<p>Best Regards, </p>
<p>Susan D. Jobseeker</p>
<p>P.S. You may also visit my online portfolio at <a href="http://www.whatever" rel="nofollow">http://www.whatever</a> whatever .com.</p>
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		<title>By: Melissa Donovan</title>
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		<dc:creator>Melissa Donovan</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 06 Nov 2007 07:52:05 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>A good rule of thumb is never start a cover letter with the word &quot;I.&quot; Start it with &quot;you&quot; or just about anything else.  It&#039;s best, actually, to avoid that word as much as possible in any cover letter.  

Why? Because people, especially important ones who make hiring decisions, like to feel significant, and what makes them feel significant is when you talk about anything other than yourself.  The trick is to talk about them and how whatever it is you&#039;re offering will make their life better.

It&#039;s hard to do when you&#039;re selling yourself but it can be done.

-Melissa Donovan
&lt;a href=&quot;http://www.melissadonovan.com&quot; rel=&quot;nofollow&quot;&gt;Writing for Writers&lt;/a&gt;</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>A good rule of thumb is never start a cover letter with the word &#8220;I.&#8221; Start it with &#8220;you&#8221; or just about anything else.  It&#8217;s best, actually, to avoid that word as much as possible in any cover letter.  </p>
<p>Why? Because people, especially important ones who make hiring decisions, like to feel significant, and what makes them feel significant is when you talk about anything other than yourself.  The trick is to talk about them and how whatever it is you&#8217;re offering will make their life better.</p>
<p>It&#8217;s hard to do when you&#8217;re selling yourself but it can be done.</p>
<p>-Melissa Donovan<br />
<a href="http://www.melissadonovan.com" rel="nofollow">Writing for Writers</a></p>
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		<title>By: Susan</title>
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		<dc:creator>Susan</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 06 Nov 2007 04:39:39 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Have fun at the expo!  

The cover letter looks good to me, but I&#039;d make sure to be extra careful when proof-reading, the Troilee&#039;s comment stuck out to me too but I couldn&#039;t figure out how to say what was wrong with it, thanks Troilee for putting it so well.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Have fun at the expo!  </p>
<p>The cover letter looks good to me, but I&#8217;d make sure to be extra careful when proof-reading, the Troilee&#8217;s comment stuck out to me too but I couldn&#8217;t figure out how to say what was wrong with it, thanks Troilee for putting it so well.</p>
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		<title>By: allena</title>
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		<dc:creator>allena</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 06 Nov 2007 02:10:30 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>I&#039;d pull it into paragraphs more-- people scan, so make it easy to scan. But, yeah, I like it!</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>I&#8217;d pull it into paragraphs more&#8211; people scan, so make it easy to scan. But, yeah, I like it!</p>
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		<title>By: Troilee</title>
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		<dc:creator>Troilee</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 06 Nov 2007 00:17:38 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>I don&#039;t feel qualified to comment on the cover letter itself, but I did want to mention the importance of grammar, particularly subject/verb agreement.

&quot;Money and career management is one of my specialty areas,...&quot;

Two part subject = plural verb. It should read, &quot;Money and career management are two (or simply &quot;are&quot;) of my specialty areas,...&quot;

I&#039;m not trying to be snarky, but little things like this are important, especially when one asserts their command of grammar in the next paragraph.

Troi</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>I don&#8217;t feel qualified to comment on the cover letter itself, but I did want to mention the importance of grammar, particularly subject/verb agreement.</p>
<p>&#8220;Money and career management is one of my specialty areas,&#8230;&#8221;</p>
<p>Two part subject = plural verb. It should read, &#8220;Money and career management are two (or simply &#8220;are&#8221;) of my specialty areas,&#8230;&#8221;</p>
<p>I&#8217;m not trying to be snarky, but little things like this are important, especially when one asserts their command of grammar in the next paragraph.</p>
<p>Troi</p>
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		<title>By: Angelique</title>
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		<dc:creator>Angelique</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Mon, 05 Nov 2007 17:04:25 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Have a great time at the Blog Expo!

Looking forward to hearing all about it... and to also seeing what Jennifer C. has to say.  She&#039;s a definite fave of mine around the blogosphere!</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Have a great time at the Blog Expo!</p>
<p>Looking forward to hearing all about it&#8230; and to also seeing what Jennifer C. has to say.  She&#8217;s a definite fave of mine around the blogosphere!</p>
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		<title>By: Chandra</title>
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		<dc:creator>Chandra</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Mon, 05 Nov 2007 16:25:19 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Deb,

The Web site under consideration is revealed in the first sentence of the last paragraph.

Regarding the cover letter, I disagree about including the titles of the sample articles.  In my opinion, they are relevant because they could provide additional clarification for the person who reads the cover letter whether or not the writer is suitable to provide content for the Web site.

I think the writer should choose material very carefully, however.  If the included titles indicate articles that are trivial, outdated, taboo, off topic, or otherwise questionable, that could work against his or her goal to establish a relationship with the Web site.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Deb,</p>
<p>The Web site under consideration is revealed in the first sentence of the last paragraph.</p>
<p>Regarding the cover letter, I disagree about including the titles of the sample articles.  In my opinion, they are relevant because they could provide additional clarification for the person who reads the cover letter whether or not the writer is suitable to provide content for the Web site.</p>
<p>I think the writer should choose material very carefully, however.  If the included titles indicate articles that are trivial, outdated, taboo, off topic, or otherwise questionable, that could work against his or her goal to establish a relationship with the Web site.</p>
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		<title>By: Sue</title>
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		<dc:creator>Sue</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Mon, 05 Nov 2007 16:18:36 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Phil (and others), one thing that gets talked about a lot in these clinics is eliminating the &quot;I&quot; factor, but no one has really described how to avoid it.  

I liked this letter for the most part (it is very similar to my LOI template). The part that I personally didn&#039;t like was the statement that &quot;these traits will undoubtedly be an asset . . .&quot;  That feels arrogant, but that&#039;s also probably picking a nit on my part.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Phil (and others), one thing that gets talked about a lot in these clinics is eliminating the &#8220;I&#8221; factor, but no one has really described how to avoid it.  </p>
<p>I liked this letter for the most part (it is very similar to my LOI template). The part that I personally didn&#8217;t like was the statement that &#8220;these traits will undoubtedly be an asset . . .&#8221;  That feels arrogant, but that&#8217;s also probably picking a nit on my part.</p>
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		<title>By: Phil</title>
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		<dc:creator>Phil</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Mon, 05 Nov 2007 15:57:44 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Still to many I&#039;s. Suggest changing it up with things like &quot;my work appears in Young Money...&quot; and similar wording to avoid so many I&#039;s, though I struggle with this issue as well.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Still to many I&#8217;s. Suggest changing it up with things like &#8220;my work appears in Young Money&#8230;&#8221; and similar wording to avoid so many I&#8217;s, though I struggle with this issue as well.</p>
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